CantaloupeLifestyle@lemmy.world to politics @lemmy.worldEnglish · 10 months agoSecret Service agents protecting Biden’s granddaughter open fire when 3 people try to break into SUVapnews.comexternal-linkmessage-square203fedilinkarrow-up1599arrow-down137
arrow-up1562arrow-down1external-linkSecret Service agents protecting Biden’s granddaughter open fire when 3 people try to break into SUVapnews.comCantaloupeLifestyle@lemmy.world to politics @lemmy.worldEnglish · 10 months agomessage-square203fedilink
minus-squareEl Barto@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up5arrow-down1·10 months agoHow would you have written it?
minus-squareNotMyOldRedditName@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up14arrow-down10·10 months agoNot OP Secret Service agents protecting Biden’s granddaughter open fire when 3 people pick the wrong SUV to streal.
minus-squareMaggoty@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up14arrow-down1·10 months agoSecret Service Fires Shots at Car Thieves But we don’t do non sensationalist headlines anymore.
minus-squareEl Barto@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up10arrow-down7·10 months agoYou just made me realize that the original headline doesn’t specify that the SUV is where the granddaughter is. You also make that mistake. I think we can do better. Let’s see: Secret Service open fire at thieves who unknowingly attempted to break into SUV carrying Biden’s granddaughter. And I still think we can do better, but right now I’m le tired.
minus-squareBlaidd@lemm.eelinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up10arrow-down1·edit-210 months agoThe vehicle was empty, it wasn’t carrying anyone.
minus-squareEl Barto@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up2·10 months agoAh, serves me right for not reading TFA. In that case I would have simply written what @[email protected] wrote in this very thread.
minus-squareafraid_of_zombies@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up4arrow-down1·10 months agoThat implies that there was a right SUV to steal.
How would you have written it?
Not OP
Secret Service agents protecting Biden’s granddaughter open fire when 3 people pick the wrong SUV to streal.
Secret Service Fires Shots at Car Thieves
But we don’t do non sensationalist headlines anymore.
You just made me realize that the original headline doesn’t specify that the SUV is where the granddaughter is. You also make that mistake.
I think we can do better. Let’s see:
Secret Service open fire at thieves who unknowingly attempted to break into SUV carrying Biden’s granddaughter.
And I still think we can do better, but right now I’m le tired.
The vehicle was empty, it wasn’t carrying anyone.
Ah, serves me right for not reading TFA.
In that case I would have simply written what @[email protected] wrote in this very thread.
That implies that there was a right SUV to steal.